by dreamsweet
Oh dear, I'm going to hate this. But I didn't...at all. I loved it. I would pick a different title, but the rest of the poem captured me and endeared me to you.
fantastic poem!
I love the way you use your imagery to get the context of your poem across. A little bit of internal rhyme and assonance, brings the flow of this poem right along. I wouldn't say this is a heavy hitter, but it is a good solid poem, and it conveys everything you wanted it to. I loved "stormclouds in residence". I loved how you incorportated your imagery with reality. It was seamless and smooth. The only part that made me stutter a bit was the double "myself" line. Possibly seperating the two phrases into two lines would give you the pause and make it even more poignant, but well done. It is good.
another one i really like..romantic heart you have. the title is wrong, it made think it would be a cheesy poem, and it isn't..not at all.
very lovely poetry hun!
As the afterglow of love pervades my senses ~ I reflect on his birthday present ~ that no one else knows.