All Comments on 'After The Fire'

like the contained heat in this, the curling smoke and flare of embers.

zephyrs could maybe be swapped out for something better but it's not too distracting. guilty of using it myself in the past. :)

@butters thanks for the feedback. I think I initially had shadows, which flows better but doesn't make sense semantically. I fi continue to revise this, I'll tinker with alternatives. This is inspired by something I wrote a long time ago. An abstract poem just playing with the imagery. This version feels a lot tighter, and come together organically without a lot of revision. It's the happiest I've ever been with a poem in this few attempts. To be honest. I don't think I'll change it a lot. Maybe just tinker with the flow a little. Not a huge fan of smoldering because the three syllable word doesn't quite feel right, but it has the best imagery compared to alternatives I've experimented with.