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gone awire...

The first stanza was great (esp the imagery in the first two lines) but the momentum seems to drop off after that.

These lines, for instance:

'ripped out with each soil

less space left each harvest'

sound cliched. This metaphor isn't fresh and offers the reader little to think about.

A good effort that could be great with some reworking

Write an essay on what's troubling you, sugar. This nonsense just ain't makin' the grade. :(

An interesting metaphorical piece that most women could appreciate, even if it doesn't send them to the brink of rage. Third line, did you mean to use lose instead of loose?

This poem was mentioned in Wednesday's New Poems Reviews.

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this sounds more like a poem about infertility than PMS. if it is, it's on the nose.