by 2rivers
This rendering has an almost mystical quality to the way it's worded.
Nicely done ~ pulling the reader in with all your descriptions, then your creating a sound for the reader to imagine as though this were an audio poem.
up take falling to
new
sights down is the up side
held from toes
"I died for beauty but was scarce"
always intrigues me. Something about it, the kind of sideways lines that work so well.
jim :)
make a comment on this poem because "Tracing paper" has already been commented on. This poem is equally grabbing - both in subject and presentation, some lovely imagery. Well done!