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Beautifully put. One wonderful night leaving you feeling blessed and robbed. I have added Your poem to the New Poems Recommendations Thread. Feel free to come check us out.

http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?p=93497456#post93497456

There is a lot here. It should be a short story. CS you drink too much. You didn't even have sex and you still lost your shirt. As for criticism, too much repetition and indulgence. Fewer words and more action, still I like it, flaws and all.