All Comments on 'Bold Desire'

A good effort. There's a good ryhming scheme and I like the rythmn of the piece, nice and pacy.One small point: in the first stanza, you talk about 'burrowing in your crouch'

I assume this is a typo and you meant 'crotch'

sexual core images...but...with style..bluerains

Yes... a typo error... It should be 'crotch'

Thanks for the positive comments <smiles>