All Comments on 'Breakfast Miracles'

the old splenda smile, isn't it great? In a sherbet dream, yet. Lagging a little here. A5 never the less, now let me see some commentary on what you think is good. OK?

Great poem. The last line was quite a climax; pardon the pun. Not sure S4 was necessary. I think "She was never constant about anything" with the way you set it up in the preceding line was more than sufficient. I also wondered about "for Barbados." If it was just for alliterative affect in the line, it seemed superfluous to me because the economy of your language was so well done elsewhere in the poem.

Anyway, I've known a woman's scorn once or twice before, and I'm far enough removed in time to have an appreciation for it. I look forward to reading more of your poems.

your raw, knife edged, no bullshit style is..

a welcomed breeze