by _Lynn_
Disagree with 1201 (how dare I ?). Not everything has to pared back to the bare bones: some of us like a bit of flesh and padding. This was a fine example of that little bit extra which makes the verse more complete and rounded.
Start and end with the strongest lines
Another great poem!!
you are not a poet, why attempt it? It does make sense, and it is a good tactic to open and close with your best. I'll show you a quick trick:
A myriad of colors
Their secret
The marks she craves
this says what you want, the rest is not needed
You've stuck to the concrete pretty damn well for a poetry newbie. Watch the cliches and you be writing them with the best soon. :) You're gunna get a mention in recommendations.
Miss Lynn...You hit it right on the head...so many women that are bruised hate the pain yet come back for more. I feel for them, I was once there. You understand, so that makes your writing so real and believable! I enjoy and have enjoyed everything you have written. Thank you for you and your lovely talent! Your friend...Beau