All Comments on 'Cedars'

Liked this one

but I really like this because it's short and seemingly unobtrusive until one sees the larger antiwar message and recognizes the extended metaphor. Reminds me of Emily Dickenson, sorta. :-)

A little awkward phrasing here and there to me, but tinkering would fix that. The repetition of the "ought" line is really nice.

Just one opinion & ty for a read I enjoyed.

nice!

even with the ellipses. I don't usually care for rhyme, in a couple of places it seems forced, but the poem overall communicates a lovely message in spite of the battles fought. I enjoyed reading this :)