by demure101
if a mirror is kept between 3rd. 'n 4th. line it's like a symmetry !!
Beautiful use of words and structure to catch the sentiment. But I need to write you one of winter...
by Ash, is specific. 5ed, but how old this? Is the fact that this is a Chrysalis, instead of hibernation new enough?
L2 nice. But it looks like a sleepwalk, outside of the rhyme scheme. That said, I am glad to see comments on yours, hope some newer writers can learn from you, Disagree? I'd love to hear it.
Also consider the ratio, of what you have to say in your poetry, versus comments on others.
But those moments through winter you miss are part of life as well...even if they are hard to face...