All Comments on 'City Streets Are Forgetful Places'

a potentially great poem, would recommend that you go through the poem with a comb, cutting out anything that detracts from the picture you're trying to paint. Get rid of the cliches you've put in such as 'seeing is believing' and tighten your imagery, perhaps adding more specific details would help the reader.

Pretty strong stuff. Could have huge impact with a bit of tightening, cutting at least 3-4 stanzas. Don't let it lie at this single piece.