All Comments on 'Clem Magnusson, Private Dick'

by greenmountaineer

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Ashesh9 almost 9 years ago

GM , sitting in a hotel room in cold , wet

Sydney ' stead of normally sunny Mumbai , I can 'ppreciate Clem's angst , better......5-ed .

legerdemer almost 9 years ago

Hard boiled

dicks aren't generally the stuff of poetry but you've made Clem so. It's a gem of Raymond Chandler realism and gray pavements. The last stanza just clinches it for me.

One suggestion: consider replacing 'couple a hours' with 'coupla hours' - the contraction is fitting to your poem, and blends in better to my ear.

greenmountaineer almost 9 years agoAuthor

You're absolutely right, Mer: a good example of a small change making a difference. Thanks.

tazz317 almost 9 years ago

A LOT OF FORGETTING IN THIS TALE

#1 is the expense account #2 is his brains. TK U MLJ LV NV

Tzara almost 9 years ago

I used to co-own a bookstore

that specialized in mystery fiction. So your poem really worked for me. Though, I think, you've got the hourly charge wrong. It's probably low for a contemporary PI novel, but apparently high (see http://www.payscale.com/research/US/Certification=Private_Investigator_License/Hourly_Rate) for the Real World.

Doesn't matter. A fun poem, gm.

tazz317 almost 9 years ago

AND I WONDER

if the tuna was packed with water or oil, TK U MLJ LV NV