All Comments on 'crimson lines'

but I don't think it's quite where it could be yet--just my preference, but I'd end the poem at "feet" and revise for more metaphor--especially at the beginning. There's more to this lovely poem that wants to be said. :)

Ange's comment I too felt a little let down at the end of this as if it had been given up on too soon. A shame, because it has great promise early on.