All Comments on 'crystal pools of lies'

you may want to consider an alternative ot your line breaks, i.e. (tenatively)

blue eyes haunted me most of my days/

in my sleep, at the market,in the rush/

hour craze, he came....

Your ideas and images are so intense, but they seem to call for a more free verse form with the rhyme less obvious. Changes in line breaks would make them appear as echoes within the text, and would enhance your message. Your 'crystal pools of lies' reached me. So poignant.