All Comments on 'Danger in Youth'

Not a metaphor, but an example.

You must be doing something right,

I could see both cat and bird,

see the ending coming,

and yet I still felt sorrow for the bird.

Moral: Don't let your know-it-all teenager drink and drive.

The read is just a little choppy,

which is a shame because your story is so touching

and a true slice of life.

You could also consider longer stanzas.

Keep writing!

really good. It may need a little work here and there, but it's good. I enjoyed reading it. Thanks. :)