- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Darwinian
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by Tzara
- 16 Comments
legerdemerover 8 years agoI really like this poem - it appeals to me on many levels. (Thanks to AlwaysHungry, who steered me to it.) Evolution and genetics woven perfectly into the psychology of lust and love.
But I do agree with others on the last line - the meaning is right on, but the phrasing falls flat - that line broke the rails, and instead of leading me on to ponder, it pulled me up short.
gi_janetabout 12 years agoLove the perspective! Frameshift lower, though, and you might see that those genes work well only when they collaborate with other genes. A genome is collaborative, and transient.
LeBrozover 16 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,000 poems.
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Anonymousover 18 years agoA well written little poem. Thought this was quite thought provoking whilst managing to be intelligent at the same time. Well done!
Anonymousover 18 years agobiological basis of behavior
the best class I ever took-- this should be on the inside cover :)
I recommend you re-thinking the last line. It seems so abrupt and almost changing the subject/feel; then leaving you off... well done
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WickedEveover 18 years agoI've read a few of your poems. I'm not sure if any of the others are this interesting. I guess I need to go check them out. :)
twelveooneover 18 years agosmartly written, deducted a point for Fecund, but you made up for it with the play in words
lobomaoover 18 years agolove it
drawn together
with crude crayons
irregular lines
tell us miles
of our iffy origins
