All Comments on 'Delightful Torment'

here just as I loved it there, in the PF&D thread. I also like the visual meandering zig-zag of the line endings - like a bit of lace trim.

Some of my favorite lines: "It's in the pauses/ those spaces between," "the mischievous curl / of a lip or the heat/ deep in hazel," and "the pulse of "I want" ." Very lovely, erotic in an understated way.

Very nice, Lyricalli, certainly deserving of Mer's recommendation in PF&D.

The rhythm had a sensuous beat for me, and I prefer erotic poetry that is more suggestive than descriptive, which this one is. The sense of anticipation you've created is very erotic.

Someone once wrote that every word used in a poem should be chosen with intention. At first, I was taken back by "Blinded" because it could suggest "blindsided" as well as "blindfolded," but that's not the case, given stanzas 3&4, and for the life of me, I couldn't think of an acceptable substitute.

I also liked the way "It" tied stanzas 1&2 with 3&4 together and added to the anticipation by peaking the reader's interest in determining what "it" means.

done

Skilfully sculpted erotica.

Excellent.

Perfection.

What an inspiring piece of poetry. Loved it.

Also, Thank you for your kind words.