All Comments on 'doing time'

another fine poem laelia. much emotion in the words, nicely done. keep em' coming. :)

un a few words.

You get a sense of both people...and she's the stronger one.

great work

thank you

an interesting flow with this one, an intriguing poem. I am left to wonder if both are falling downward or if it's a clever hint of sexuality at the end. I like that...

jim : )

Up front and to the point. Well written, love the last 3

lines. They would of been lost in a longer wordy poem.

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,000 poems.

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I was taken very easy by this poem which sounds so much like a ballad which should be fitted with the right melody and sung to all whose lives are hanging there and then one day there might be something else for them too...

And thanks again LeBroz for directing me to this poet throuuh your selections!