All Comments on 'Down ...'

dreamy! I enjoyed how this flowed, very smooth.

a sense of strawberry fields of barbie come to mind..in her pink filled world...blue

Uplifting about going down down down

Bidirectional poetry. :)

of going to raising attributes. wonderful flow...perhaps too many downs?

I like over half of your poem. The strawberries and cream make me want to barf.

The middle is very good. I'd keep this and toss the strawberries:

a day I shall never forget.

rain poured, your shirt drenched

a glove fit, outlining your smile

penciled in from a moist mouth

going down

down

down with those tight fitting levis

as twin seats dimpled from overexposure

and whirlpool visions swirl

taking me down

down

down

to cotton fields spread wide

Delicious

The image I took away

Was of the time she gave me a

Brandy drink;

Refused to stop pouring

Got me thoroughly splattered;

Even now, years later

Leaves me needing a napkin...

down

...down

.......down

"Got 'DOWN' with it... did ya <grinin!

Loved the poem (~_*) but you knew that <chuckleboned

to the last drop, girly this was delish!!!

Enjoyed the read thanks for sharing

TT