All Comments on 'drenched'

So I'm biased;

Enough left unsaid to let the reader fill in the blanks;

I see someone caught in the rain,

Cold and shivering

No where to go...

short and direct and.......piddling?

the full note at the bottom did not come through, it was a thank you to LeBroz and Wildsweetone for all three of us created the poem, thanks y'all. I am assuming the < grin errased the rest of thew comment

thanks you two, Art~

grey clouds grow,

droplets accumulate

and a cloud's shower crashes

onto shoulders -

pelting the drenched.

Hmm...

Lebroz said it made him think of someone left in the rain cold with nowhere to go. I felt pain but the last lines tell me something different, so I'm left to just...no, no, no...I'm still thinking pain. <nods and says damn it> This is fairly simple, saldne. <goes for coffee>

and your cloud poem came up before my illustrated cloud poem!

LOL

the picture file got screwed up...oh well next week you'll see that we should have combined them for a complete train of thought! LOL ;)

loved it all of you it was great!

Kisses,

~LB~