All Comments on 'Dunks'

Sounds like a woman ~

Trying to get a rise out of a man ~

Trying to live a life so bland.

And what's wrong with an alt like

Liar2

or

Liar v. 2.0 ?

"And what's wrong with an alt like

Liar2

or

Liar v. 2.0 ?"

Would be kinda boring, no?

Besides: Poetry, not poet. So there. ;)

/L or MM

.......brilliantly depressing - not good for my Thnx g'ing hangover. :-(

Tess

I like the way you use the biscuits and crackers to set the mood. Who would have thought that soggy crackers in the bottom of the cup could give the reader a feeling of hopelessness. And the last two strophes are just a perfect way to finish the poem.

As wickedEve said, the last two strophes, say it all. If all that you see in your present are your past years “stretching out

in merciless procession”, even the bickering and senseless tormenting could be seen as a temporary refuge.

But in hearing that, I also hear: better work harder on your retirement days right now, spiritually speaking, with your lady, and on your own. I know what you are telling me. Prepare for old age, aside from your retirement funds. Be mindful, live meaningfully. Right now.

by any other name is still an alt!

Yes, MM is an alt. So?

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,000 poems.

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