All Comments on 'End of a Dream'

"my muse is icarus, lands like a leper's dawn"

cryptic? my dear lame readers?

you can delete, or you can consider

both were punished vide Capitol Hi- sorry - Olympus up nigh !!

Really like this though I think you could reduce it down some and make it purer by losing some unnecessary words. It's pretty clear to me that it's Daedalus narrating the poem, but if you felt you needed to clarify that for readers (I don't), you could always put Daedalus in the title somehow.

All in all a lovely classical read. Thanks for sharing it.

:-)

Worked a treat for the most part.

verse 1 stanza 2 - two syllables too long

and realisation in stanza 7 can trip the tongue to spoil the rhythm - but that may be just my reading.

Great stuff as ever. S.O.

Sacrificed on the altar of a father's dreams!

going up against 2 biggies, Auden, and Stevens or was that WCW, i forget, anyhow adding what?