All Comments on 'Even when my hair went grey'

I thought the way it ended made the poem...thanks.

I think you have to have greyed a bit to fully appreciate this poem.

Thank you for a fine and mature read.

I liked the way it slipped into some well defined images. Though initially I wasn't draw into the poem, the ending grabbed me and I broke into a sad smile. Nicely done.

jim : )

this poem is mentioned in the New Poem Review Thread:

http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=15098747&posted=1#post15098747

jim : )

and it leads the reader along nicely. sad it may be, but it definitely worth the read......don

I see you are new to the site.

I liked this a lot at several levels. When you have a close attachment to someone, sure there is always an imprint in your memories.

I like the palimpsest bit. There is a lot of truth there. I've never thought as memory as something tucked in little boxes, one for each memory. I look at it like the scrabble letters in their bag, everytime you pull a word out it is a little different.

Very nicely done!

at the end

when my curtain draws down

I wonder who will wonder

and care as I care

as i leave the stage

who will stand and shout

encore

a shame really

to learn that love endures

only by riding it out

to the end.

As in a scrapbook,

old love lives on ~

never replaced;

even in death, it never dies...

I wonder if anyone wil renmber me like that after I am gone.

intense, I love the flow of your writing, how it involved Action, not just description, it pulled me right through to the end, to the thud, left reverberating long after I stopped reading.

You are not permitted to leave literotica.

oop that last comment was me.

and no I am not tying her up in the basement.

as long as she stays that is.

annas

yes, the begining did not grab me but you got a little more real half way through and the ending was cutting. I gave you a five for it none the less, well earned.

~S

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