by annaswirls
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,500 poems.
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I just love 'in voice-over photographic collages' Also I think you are right, 'it must be raining somewhere in the North'
ty,BD
"you come to me on days of trancendence"
good open, followed by the crow dropping the cross, demands attention
#3 is a bit shopworn, but a nice visual
#4 blows me away, consider changing imaginary to imagined to mirror other line more closely.
#5 - like
#6 I like the use of the words you(3) coming(2) fall(2) down(2); hypnotic
#3,4,5 have hair, easy enough to put it als into #2, consider a unifying word,
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I was able to finish the poem but it didn't help me understand what in the well.... you were saying??? I read your poem <grin
the pull from
north to south
mixed with particals
a water drop
is enough to remind
and keep this thing
alive
A+, miz teacher.
curt
is as heavy as you want to read it. "Evidence" flows
well for me. All the pieces smooth, I just can't
figure out the puzzle. sand s.