All Comments on 'Eyeing The Wallpaper After A Walk'

Good poem.

Some lines are especially good.

Flowers dot these walls

ringing with roses and sweet green leaves

Chasing lovestrings like bits of paper in the wind

I think the beginning is a little rocky, could be edited a bit, but it builds beautifully. It's a very strong, searching piece of poetry.

I agree with the comment below-- it stumbles a bit out of the gate but gets steadily stronger. An excellent poem.

fly

Your poem has been mentioned on the new poems review thread for Tuesday 1st of March.

love the visuals I got from this poem,

superb poetry DA~ (~_~)

and appreciated this lovely work.

Skittery fingers on stone floors

probe every crevice with precision -

precisely what are they looking for?

salvation redemption absolution

nirvana enlightenment

all means to an end

peace

Very good words.

Syn

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,500 poems.

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