All Comments on 'First Date'

Sweetly - almost innocently - erotic. It seems full of youthful indecision and bravado then, finally self-control. Lovely in it's simplicity and yearning.

Tess

lead into this, the jaded sophisticate, but - by the close - turn this projection on its head with an acknowledgement of human nature. mind certainly struggles over matter in this instance.

these lines embrace the reader; definitely no exclusion zone. :)

Barely controlling trembling hands

from offering caresses

to private parts

in public places.

Keeping my groans silent.

Very intimate insight into how the man feels, I wonder if she was feeing the same

Five.

is a great hook, leading to an interresting back-and-forth.

I feel this is a bit of a beparture from your usual style. More staright on, hands on, allowing it to be blunt and less concerned with elocution than your usual offerings. Works for me.

Enjoyed this.....very well done! :)

Brilliant!