All Comments on 'For the Stain She Left on his Pants'

Using the colour purple to shade the view as bleak, followed by never praying which brings to mind instant cynisism, wishing for death but not having the way out, this is a five but it is a very dark, very bleak piece.

Especially that, "tongue-glove compartment with cyanide where her wisdom tooth was".

I'm wondering about that "Shut! Up!" if it serves as punctuation because without it sounds (I read all poetry out loud) as if the first three stanza are all said in one breath. It does speed up timing making it feel more frantic, so perhaps that's intentional with the poem's content.

Interesting poem!

"It was the DNA Bill left on her dress !"

tod, much of my poetry has a dark side for the good or the bad of it because I think we all have a dark side to ourselves. For most of us, it doesn't come close to what is represented here fortunately. That I spent a career working with criminal offenders I'm sure has affected my poetry.

Neo: nice catch on the pace of the poem and then the abrupt "Shut!/Up!"