All Comments on 'Forbidden Fruit'

wonderful discripion of sex, the sensual comparison to fruit was delicious you make me hungry for both.

i love it when 'erotic' includes other subjects than sex! WOnderfully erotic description.

here, but suffered a bit from fruitis interruptus when mid stanza suddenly: "All too soon the fruit is gone." Although you pick up again with peaches and cherries, it seemed that the line above should have been presented last... or perhaps not at all because I love "Sweet black cherry lust." as a finish.

jim : )

this poem is mentioned in the New Poem Review Thread:

http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=15098747&posted=1#post15098747

jim : )

a tasty treat....good job!

Very nice little write;

full of fruity delights ~

but I agree with jim about that line of the fruit being gone - if it must appear, it would seem to be best at the end...

the outcome desired. TK U MLJ LV NV