by darkerdreamer
though I think it is a little uneven in parts. Some of the line breaks seem to make the poem read in a very choppy fashion (S3 in particular) and I am never a fan of lack of capitalization, though that's merely a stylistic quibble. The close is quite good, I think. Good job.
you could lose the line "with any luck".
There are a few other places you have a few extra words and it draws away from the poem that is strong work.
I thought I had read you before, I guess not. Been missing out!
good work
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'Oh, and all those creative urges which tickle and tackle you at day and at night (and that humor too), those I shall call sublimations', said the professor and rested from his work.