All Comments on 'Fullfillment'

I can touch it.Nice use of rhythm and phrasing.Certainly gets the point across...and the other poets lines not only fit seamlessly, but add to the effect. Nice job.

Lovely use of words, and to quote from others, too. Your poetry is still improving, and I thought it was already excellent to begin with. Keep improving, LilDarlin. Keep writing. Looking forward to your next submission.

Good job, Lil! I like this a lot! Thanks!

wonderful~

well thought out choice of words...

shining star of a poem...

...and poet~

in a word.... steamy ;)

A great collection here you have,

words and letters of feelings you gave.

But don't stop now more I desire,

for you capture the meaning of the fire.

Dave

LOVE YOUR WORK

Just tell me How you want me

Tell me what you want 1

I am here waiting

Punch drunk with our love- I just couldn't stop after these lines. I loved it all. Flowed nice and easy. Hot to trot, darling :)

You nailed it LilDarlin, as usual! Love reading your stuff!

Wordsmithing and crafting is excellent. I am there with you and in you. Thanks for the great poem!

'Punch drunk with our love' seemed a little cheesy to me (I was about to go have some gin on that), but you had me with original visuals with 'rubbing souls' and 'painting your shaft'. The repeating of the form of the word of 'seize' didn't do anything for me either. Then you got me again with 'splattered eons'. Overall the heat melted the things I otherwise bugged me. Excellent writing, Lil. Work it, girl!

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,500 poems.

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