All Comments on 'Gently'

I really like the first part of your poem,

up until hips,

where you begin to lean towards Lit. tastes.

Before that it is strongly romantic and innocent.

Although gentle and subtle for Lit.

I find the second part more common.

However, the final lines do give an honest twist

to naivet?'s tryst with sophistication.

...and gave it five. I'm so glad to read your work Basilisk. More please.

that comes across in this poem. I agree with the comment by YDD. I think the poem would be stronger without these few lines

Ease you through my lips

Hips

Fingertips.

because they are the only ones in the poem that aren't really understated, although one could argue that "Fingertips" suggests loss and so segues well to the last lines in the piece. Still, I think the poem as a whole is more cohesive without those three.

Wonderful read. Thank you for sharing it.

--Angeline