All Comments on 'Greener'

With a little trimming, this will be an excellent piece. The last stanza, in particular, could be cut down. It doesn't help the rythmn and the language isn't as effective as the first four stanzas. Your imagery is good, esp in the third stanza

with:

'and your image returned

every time

he pressed my cervix

like the button on a slide projector

stuck on you.'

I enjoyed this simile. Consider extending this throughout the poem.

Keep up the good work

Five.