by Giveandgetoral
ok, this made me smile as i began reading it. it would have kept me smiling if you'd have managed to keep the third verse onwards as crisp as the first two. you set up an expectation rhythm/rhymewise in one and two that then went to pot as you continued. if your gypsy or pirate could tinker with this till it was all ship-shape and bristol-fashion, i think it'd be pieces of eight for this. till then, you may be walkin' the plank, me hearty!
but she is correct. It needs some work in the second part. I did crack up me lass.