All Comments on 'Halden Transit, Saturday to Sunday'

A simple proof

Witness here:

There's poetry in everything

All you need's to see.

Beautiful imagery, a soulful poem that can be read on so many different levels.

Excellent

the break here is probably a bad idea, as if the ending is...

coming up.

I feel it would be better understated. Not that kind of poem.

will reflect,

through a double glazed window,

OK Minor

Very nicely done. Just one suggestion.

I think that 'forward and sideways at once,'

is a bit redundant and as a result takes away

from the beautiful image you created with

'The face in between

a Picasso mosaic,'

To me anyway, it feels like you don't trust the

reader and you are explaining what 'a Picasso mosaic'

is. By the way I really love the image created by

'a Picasso mosaic.'

Great poem.

BD

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 40,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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