All Comments on 'Have Your Fingers Danced?'

As someone who has written a few poems with similar flavor, I find it interesting that this one lands on my critique day. okay, down to it... There is supposed to be passion in this poem according to the context, some sort of intensly sexual experience, and everytime you add a singsong rhyme/assonance to that it makes me feel like I want to have a fake orgasm. It's exactly like that. "oh ohhh ohhh, yeah baby this is great stuff" *rolls eyes" Dude, you have a particular voice that could do some great stuff, don't ruin the true emotion of the thing by using the incorrect tool. You have a pretty good grasp of meter, I think you should use rhyme and assonance within this poem but not in pseudo"couplet" form. That's what breaks this poem for me. I'm not sure if some of the word choices match the quill to parchment feel of this poem, either, but then, mine never did either. However, now, by reading your poem, I see what everyone was saying. So you've helped me with my poetry too, thanks.

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