All Comments on 'He Fell Through a Crack in a Fingerprint'

I like the images here esp 'smashed insect maps'which is very suggestive, but think about not using ryhme, makes the poem sound a little forced

Sounds like quite a party...

this poem was mentioned in the NEW POEMS REVIEWS...

Isn't "it's" a contraction for it is or it has? Sorry to be ever the nitpicker Mr.Bill but if you intended the possessive (as you seemed to) your poem should read "has seen its day."

images...the last line could be worded to make the poem more mysterious..although it may take some thinking to achieve the magic...still it has a mystical wonderment...I enjoyed reading it..blue

good bd...

work onthe gram. stuff a bit...but good! the point is good and the wording great! overall i love it..

**HUGS**

T

and your poem is good, very interesting images. I didn't quite follow all of them, but I have to read it a few more times to get a good feel for it. For example, I thought the image of the hand walking was odd (and made me think of "let your fingers do the walking"), but I loved the ending that follows it.

--Angeline

i love the way you have used language in this poem!

wso

Bill sir, I really like the way you mislead--i insist on reading 'transparent insect traps', there's probably some obscure cognitive reason for it, but you hit on that great dylan thomas thing now and then in your writing...i'm a fan.

-joe

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 40,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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