All Comments on 'Heat-Death'

I am enjoying your poetry and am glad you are here.

-Curiouswife

I think there are some problems with this poem. The "When I was younger" start seems irrelevant, as you don't expand on that to say why now (when you are older) that experience was important. The rest of the poem is in the past, so that phrase doesn't matter.<P>

I don't know, maybe you want to say "As a child..."? (Not that that helps what I think the problem is.)<P>

Anyway, sorry, it's basically a well-done poem, well imaged. I actually had an experience quite like that recently (a robin flew into the window of my parents' house while I was there), and you've told that story well and true.<P>

Completely off-subject I'll say that my first response to the title ("Heat-Death") is that it is a poem about Thermodynamic Entropy and the heat-death of the universe. :-)<P>

Sorry. I minored in physics.