All Comments on 'His Offering'

I also liked the way you tapered the lines in the 2 stanzas.

It slowed things down, the way lovemaking should be as well the memory of savoring it.

Lovely, Mer, but the fly in the ointment for me is "suckle." I know what you mean, but I can't find any other definition for it than the breastfeeding of a baby or young animal, and for me at least it gets in the way of the other beautiful erotic images.