by DeepAsleep
I don't use the rating thermometers.
My perkspective on your poem is posted in the poetry forum on the new poems thread.
but that title... wow. Talk about an attention grabber. :)
...a lot here to like -- clear thought and clever phrasing abound -- I think the line breaks, however, are poorly considered, and the punctuation inconsistent to the point of being rushed. This is a very strong poem, I think, in need of another rewrite to make it even stronger.