by Sander Roscoe Wolff
Wow! This was excellent! I felt this one.
I'm just wondering if it would've sounded better without so many "your" and "you" words:
This moment expands,
Stretching out beyond my knowing.
Your hands hold my head as
Your tears touch me.
I comfort you in your grief,
Smile gently to ease your loss,
And do not speak of the pain that
Rends us.
Hmm..
This moment expands,
Stretching out beyond my knowing.
Your hands hold my head as
Tears touch me.
I comfort in your grief,
Smile gently to ease your loss,
And do not speak of the pain that
Rends us.
Thanks for the read, sal