All Comments on 'I lie, lonely as a cloud'

I have mixed feelings about the first stanza, it is a great counterpoint but a lousy lead-in.

ah gentle winter, come and cover us with your dark promise of sleep and an eventual spring; whisper the wind around us and pass as ominous and inexplicable as a cloud. So seasons and seeds pass as we are only bystanders planted in our lonely little plots.

Imagery that resonates so well when freezing one's butt off in frigid Arctic cold.

Your sensitive and imaginative images could not be ignored. I feel that you could have polished the poem some more to make it more cohesive. I am waiting for more.