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real and so very sexy

the first expression of a poem. With a bit of variation in your line structure it would have been a lot more fun. You may "want to" drop all of the sameness, thereby moving it into a more lyrical song, than to leave it as the chanting litany I perceive it to be right now.

I picture this being whispered for some reason. I like how it wraps up, the last line makes it(for me anyway)...Thanks.

~Merry