All Comments on 'If I Could Crawl Inside You'

you're work is not bad. Most of the time they do have nice twists at the end. But this is a comment about behaviour. Why no comments on anyone else's? Surely you do not think yourself that good, or in need of improvement.

BTW A5

I puzzled over the line "a slim strong vise" a bit, but I think it's fine because it adds interest. There is something about the poem that makes me feel you had more to say, but didn't. Which is also just fine :)

This... I feel as if I know exactly what you mean, tango. Just once, we all need to feel this way about someone.

You've commented before on my dialogue. If I could write poetry half as vivid as this, I'm not sure I'd do anything else.

Five.