All Comments on 'If You Listen'

"The Taj Mahal... the greatest erection a man has ever given a woman."

D.A., there's a lot of good stuff here, but a few too many rough spots to call it "ready". I'd like to see this after some tweaking.

amazing how many words we use, and how many times we try, to explain what we know to be unexplainable.

I love the picture of you screaming out the car windows.

You are a beat poet at heart brother.

I enjoy your work immensely.

What a great read! The pace is as breathtaking as a careening joy ride with all the windows down, and such beautiful sentiment!

Thanks, DA, for taking us along!

This poem opens with a bang but the ride while fast

got a little boring. There are several works in here.

but hey (took their rhythm with them) you got a copyright

on that?

i found myself riveted in spots / then questioning line breaks that halt the power and flow / then riveted again / then slowed / there is unquestionable power here / in my mind, it needs to be surrounded somehow / trimming? / purposeful line breakage?