by Gale82
Gale,
A plethora of line ending rhymes in a poem often turns it into sounding like a nursery rhyme, but this is pretty good IMO. The variations you use with rhythm and punctuation have enough variation to make it pleasing to the ear. I liked the inversion if the adjective in line 1 to start the poem, although others may take exception to that because "we don't talk like that." I don't (maybe because I wish we did sometimes.)
"Sweet" was overused in the first stanza, and you lost me a bit in the last two lines of the poem because the words sounded discordant when those that preceded it for the most part settled into a nice rhythm that matched the theme of your poem.
That said, I'm looking forward to rading more of your submissions.