by Chris Cross
keep your pants zipped when you try to ride on the popularity of a music..this is an insult to the great Darren Hayes!
Stanza 2 line 5 should read "lie back" not "like back". How on earth did you miss that?
I want to be constructive when I say that this is school-level poetry - sing-song and trivial as poetry. The idea is OK, the words OK, but the desperate adherence to rhythm and metre is immature.
I shall remember your prose and easily forget your poetry!