by wildsweetone
I agree with highnoon+, mint-vinegared is on the bizarre side, of course that's my favorite side and ditto the last two lines.
eerie, almost. I hate the score thing, because I think it is closer to 95 than 75,but I didnt want to hit 100% and have only voted a 4.
I might suggest one tiny change.
where you have "mint-vinegared", try it without the - ed on vinegar. It makes it softer, just by the deletion of the hard "d" sound
the rest of the poem seems fem throughout ( regardless of the sex of the bird, lol)
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I really enjoyed this, made me think of howling winds and halloween :)
...you've made here, WSO. "Sometimes roasts float/on the breeze" is, I think, quite good. I also agree with 1201 that the last two lines are excellent.
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The wind's not odd,
it's pure innocence;
it's the reader
and writer that are out there,
looking for ~ something.
A nice write.
I like the changes you made to tie the ending in with the rest of the poem.
nice write, odd wind blew from the mouth of 12 for everything is bizzare to that one <grin> perhaps that is because they are bizzare <bigrin>
I found this poem to be very good (my opinion of course) but ...nice write