All Comments on 'Long-Tailed Tit'

of the last flight to .......eternity ............

Poor birdie. Like what you have done with rhyme and sound in this. It may well be a form that I cannot name, but whatever it is I like it. I have to say, though, a title like that one on Lit is bound to be misinterpreted - I was almost expecting something about tasseled nipple clips! (smile).

the price for freedom affects all. TK U MLJ LV NV

I don't recognize the form either (I know, I should), but it's reminiscent of Dickenson to me. Not sure if I like the break and the capitalizing of "The" as it breaks the sentence to me, but maybe it's a metric requirement?

I like your restraint in what could easily get bathetic. I can hear that horrible sad thud at the end.