All Comments on 'Love Detector'

Honestly, this doesn't really read like poetry. It seems to be more like a news article with line breaks to give it the appearance of poetry... especially in the beginning. At least, it reads that way to me.

Though, I do believe with a little work it could sound more poetic. It's interesting enough material to make it worth a revision.

that the cynical tone of the piece and the use of a good deal of hard consonant sounds make this seem sort of detached and noncomittal, but I think it is still poetic, if read with the right disposition :)