All Comments on 'Love Flight'

Love does indeed conquer all.

: )

Thank you

that so many of your really good poems possess. The first stanza just felt much too weighty. You might consider some trimming, for example:

"Last night, I flew up there

and felt the pangs of your desire

like the unravelling spiral cord

that touched my heart in possession

of aches and love and gentle laughter."

Last night I flew

felt the pang of your desire

like unravelling spiral cord -- 'love this image'

touching my heart with aches,

love and gentle laughter.

something like that. I think if you ran through the whole poem and trimmed the excess, this poem will emerge that much stronger. See what you think. This is a good poem that with a little more snipping can really shine. Nice work...

jim : )